Thursday, 28 May 2015

My egg - Ella Williams

Ella the egg
Last week my class were becoming egg parents yay! My eggs name was Ella she lived in a cozy bed and very fluffy.She has one side of her sleeping and the other side happy and awake!Some eggs didn't because they just put hair and didn't care!But sadly other eggs didn't survive because they got dropped (by accident!) This is Ella the egg-

ellathe egg

She meet two people-Eggy Minaj and lily,they had great egg houses!She said she loved our school and its the best ever! 

Well bye bye! xx Ella Williams!( = (Its a smiley face!)

My quick write -The awesome dive

Quick write story

In writing we used a photo which show a person that was about to dive into the water and it was set in Auckland because you could see the sky tower.It was a quick write so you didn't have to write a BIG AND HUGE story just like about if the person was going to be happy in the or he was sad so it was like you could control the character.Here is the photo-


My story was about the person having alone time and being free.  
I made him being a happy person and really,really wants to swim.
This is my story-
The awesome dive!  

Hiking up the trail out of breath,reaching the sunset gloom.The sun goes down to rest and the moon takes over leaving the day into the night.The water changes.The moonlight reflects like a torch in the ocean.''Ahh, Auckland is the best place to relax,'' I sighed. All alone I was feeling pleased with myself just being with no one else except….me.The day grew dark and cold but I didn't care.

I looked at the sky tower then I started looking below the dark blue sea,seeing white strikes through the place of nowhere. I can feel it. Sliding across the wharf were my feet leading me into the air. My hands curved like a dolphin fin,ready to spike out the water stopping me from going fast though it.I leaned and…….WHOOSH! I zoom into the water like a gannet catching its prey. Soaking wet I go out and do it again and again and again until I get out of breath.

I jump out and finally lay down on the grass counting the stars and making shapes from them.
I think about what I will do tomorrow. Its very hard to think what I could do. Then suddenly I have an idea.I will do what I did yesterday,Brilliant!That was still such an easy idea. Oh well I just love swimming!

By Henrietta Williams  

Tuesday, 19 May 2015

My Writing: The Game

My Writing
In writing we started using inspiration from a poem called ''foul shot'' it was based on sport.You could chose any sport and show not tell. Mrs Cameron said to use strong action verbs,capital letters on a new line each sentence and necessary words.Here is mine I used mostly some of what Mrs Cameron said.

The game.

In center ready to continue game,
as running spots the time 3-0 on scoreboard.
Rubbing hands together to get grip on the ball.
Running to get the pass,
Stamp my foot on the floor
Into position
Aiming at the hoop.
Getting eyes at the net
Looking a little bit up,
Lifting the ball to meet.                             
Brain fizzing
Wanting to get one more point
Just as I'm ready,
Crowd gasps
The ball slips.
Just getting my hands back on the ball.
Foot stuck in mud
Swirls into place
doing It over again,
Lifting feet into the air.    

The ball

And then    
And then………….

Numbers change to 4-0.